Text Change

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I said TEXT change.

I have reworded the front page of our website, and added a client list section.

Does the pipeline stuff on the 1st page grab your interest?

and does the client page look good?

Thanks

Michael
 
I thought para 1 and 2 were ok but had a go at rewording para 3 which doesn't flow as well as the others:

My 10 pence:

If an opportunity arises to make an appointment, gather a lead, generate a request for further discussion or information, we will capture it. So by the end of the campaign you will walk away with more than just a handful of appointments. You will walk away with a Pipeline of opportunities too.

Also in para 2 the Appointment Setting needs to caps for the first letters to match the other text

Guy
 
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