Conversion rate

[alice198]

Hi! I'm affilate marketer and need advice. How to improve conversion rates. After big effort and trying many messages tricks I've got only 2 conversions in 3 MONTHS!!!. What I'm doing wrong? I'm thinking it's message thing but maybe it's something other like targeted niche? Where should I write? CTO/CEO etc., staff members, stores, businesses/people using similar platforms, start ups or angels? What would work the best?

Usually they look like that:
Get your business up and running with x the ecommerce platform designed from entrepreneurs to entreprises on every stage of development. This cloud-based solution is there to help you grow your business, sell product online and in person accross multiple sales channels. The best of X it's easy to use interface, customer support, wide range of apps, integrated marketing tools and robust security features. Include outstanding features e.i. store customization without any special design skills, check out system, shipping variations and more. Sign up and start exploring platform for more plans and benefits. Start free trial now and later try 1$/month for 3 months (no credit card required, cancel membership anytime).
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Use or share my affilate link let me know and claim free gift! It's not scam or spam or whatever. Don't worry! Feel free to ask If you have any questions.

OR

Create your store with X, the ecommerce platform designed for both beginners and experienced entrepreneurs. Sign up to discover all basic & advanced features that comes with e.i. easy to use interface, millions of templates, multiple payment options, free shipping, AI tools and more. Sign up and try out free trial, later claim bonus 1$/month for next 3 months on selected plans.
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Affiliate link, no scam. Feel free to ask If you have any questions.

 

[fisicx]

Maybe it’s not the message. Maybe it’s the product. If I need an e-commerce store there are loads to choose from. What are you offering that I can’t already find on google?

 

[alice198]

Maybe it’s not the message. Maybe it’s the product. If I need an e-commerce store there are loads to choose from. What are you offering that I can’t already find on google?

So how people earn at all advertising stuff like that? If most softwares like that are providing almost identical functions and features.

 

[Mark T Jones]

I'd disagree somewhat with @fisicx - that may be why they won't ultimately buy, but the initial problem is that your message is wordy, generic and has no punch.

The only reliable starting point for marketing is to assume that they aren't remotely interested - you have about 2 seconds to make them interested

Why should I be interested?

 

[fisicx]

@Mark T Jones - if you want an online store an affiliate email would only really work if it arrived at the exact moment it was being discussed.

There are plenty of products that sell well via affiliates. An e-commerce store probably isn’t one of them as it’s not an impulse buy.

 

[alice198]

I'd disagree somewhat with @fisicx - that may be why they won't ultimately buy, but the initial problem is that your message is wordy, generic and has no punch.

The only reliable starting point for marketing is to assume that they aren't remotely interested - you have about 2 seconds to make them interested

Why should I be interested?

Create your store with X! 90 days just for 3$ on advanced tools! Start out your free trial now! -

its good message example? what to improve/delete etc? what work out the best? be more specific, please.