I have the luxury of being bored on a sun lounger today so I found your Facebook page and link to the PDF, which I read.
It’s full of so many menial things to fill text and sound like benefits which simply aren’t. And/or things that just arent going to excite a vast majority.
“We’ll invite a number of testers that back us to participate in this phase” - why on earth would anyone want to pay to become your product tester?
“We’ll update you by email every two weeks” why? About what? What do I want to keep hearing about?
“Limited edition merchandise pack” - why on earth would I want to walk around in a bright pink t-shirt claiming “I’m an original backer of motify”? I don’t. Or a mug - branded mugs are ten a penny. And I certainly don’t want a garish pink and yellow sticker in my car! As mentioned, the logo is horrible, by the way.
Absolutely nothing smacks me in the face about what is in this crowdfunder or product for me. Nothing to get me excited and desperate to part with my cash. It’s just waffle and minutaie, at this point going into the specifics of what it’ll cost me for a new key fob if I lose it, how you’ll email me to confirm my t shirt size, or how I’ll be able to upload pictures to my account! Sell me something interesting, exciting, or with value to me.
You’re also trying to cover a huge, and frankly confusing, number of bases. You’re an app that’s going to reward people for reporting things, improve road safety, give funds to community projects, also run your own community vehicles with trained mechanics, use these to train other mechanics, the service is for individuals with cars, cyclists with cycles, businesses with fleets, councils to repair roads and traffic lights….. I mean, come on! It’s pie in the sky stuff.
I’d also suggest you get your story straight as in posts above you claim this will be going ahead regardless of the crowdfunder (and if you’re in a position to do so and are ready to go signing up millions of users as quickly as you say, then I’ve no idea what difference £3500 will make). However in the deck you claim “it’s important that we reach at least 50% of our project target in the first 3 days”. So which is true?
Look, I know criticism and negativity is hard to take and this probably looks like I’m going all in to attack. But honestly, please stop, think, and assess and save yourself a lot of wasted time and money. I refer you back to “flowsignal”…. See if you can find any trace of that anywhere?