Your opinion on this method of approach?

[Magsite]

I have put together with some help from my upline the following site. Basically it is to get an free ebook titled

http://www.paid2walk.com/doordelivery-small[1].jpg

Learn how a 34 year old stay at home mum from Scotland earns an INCREDIBLE second income delivering leaflets for 2 hours a week, and how YOU could be doing the same thing in less than 3 days!

http://www.paid2walk.com

Please have a look at the website, you can download the ebook from the affiliate page at the bottom of the screen.

Thank you

Lisa

[uksbc]

hi lisa,

i like the approach - the "paid2walk" concept. i think my only difficulty is that it still looks like one of thousands of "my amazing second income" website and advertisements.

if you could look at it with a view to make it different and not look or sound like its competition.

i get tonnes of emails and sent links to one of my websites with things like this and i have no doubt some of them are great and do earn good incomes but i never ever read them :cry:

hope this didnt sound too harsh and overly critical - that is not my intention :D just my opinion on these types of marketing

[billhilton]

I completely agree with uksbc. Sensible people work on the basis that if something looks to good to be true, it probably is. They also assume that marketing copy that hypes the opportunity to make a lot of money for doing not very much is a scam.

Don't take this personally, Lisa, but I'm sceptical myself. Why would anyone pay a lot of money for two hours leaflet delivery when they can pay a kid a tenner to do it? Outline to us exactly how the business model works, and we'll all be happy to offer advice :-)

[DuaneJackson]

if something looks to good to be true, it probably is.

That's exactly what I was going to say. Don't make it look too good to be true, or it wont be believed.

Is the additional income really "incredible" or is it just "useful"? I'd be more inclined to read on if it all sounded good enough to be true.

[billhilton]

Spot on, Duane. If you promise the earth, nobody's going to be interested, because nobody's going to believe it. Tell someone that they can make a reasonable amount of money - say a tenner an hour - delivering leaflets, and the world's going to be beat a path to your door.

Basically, overhyping can kill a brand - if you can deliver on your promises, nobody's going to trust you.

[billhilton]

Duh, duh, duh - I mean, if you *can't* deliver on your promises. Once again, does anyone know a good copywriter? :-/

[Cornish Steve]

Sorry, but I am always put off by the use of superlatives such as 'incredible'. Plus, the whole thing comes across as phony. If the product has such 'massive' demand, why doesn't the company pay a few pence to mail out the leaflets?

[mattk]

This is like those systems you see on eBay:

"Make £20,000 a week from the comfort of your own home!!!!!!!!!!!!! L@@K NOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"

So, if you can make £20,000 a week from your system, why aren't you not doing it, instead of selling junk on eBay?

[Stationery-Direct]

Give us a shout if it takes off and you need leaflets printing, sort you out a good price.

Good luck

Damon
Stationery-Direct

[mattk]

"stay at home mum" - ahhhhhhhhhh, we're not in America!

[Magsite]

Thanks so far for your responce. The ebook was provided to me but I have full control over the website.

If I change the title to

Learn how a 34 year old housewife and mum from Scotland earns an income delivering leaflets for a few hours a week, and how YOU could be doing the same thing in less than 3 days!

What do you think?

[billhilton]

Yep - that's getting there. A lot of people would still be sceptical, but I think you'll raise the percentage of readers who actually have a look at what you have to say in more detail. I'd even consider losing the '..in less than three days' - that still smacks of something that's too goo to be true.

[Hayles]

I think you should add something before 'income'. Not too over the top though...

'good'?
'substantial' ?
'useful' ? - as previously suggested, think this is the best!

Hayles

[Magsite]

Thanks again, how about..

"Learn how a 34 year old housewife and mum from Scotland earns an useful income delivering leaflets for a few hours a week, and how YOU could be doing the same thing!"

[Hayles]

...you could easily be doing the same thing... ?

[billhilton]

Yep, I think that's your best bet. It no longer sounds "too good to be true". Make sure you pitch the rest of the copy along the same lines. Everyone knows they're not going to make a fortune stuffing things through people's doors, so don't use a tone that suggests they can.

Good luck.

[directmarketingadvice]

How about:

"Learn how a 34 year old housewife and mum in Scotland earns an useful income delivering leaflets for a few hours a week, and how YOU can do the same!"

Steve

[Cornish Steve]

Thanks again, how about..

"Learn how a 34 year old housewife and mum from Scotland earns an useful income delivering leaflets for a few hours a week, and how YOU could be doing the same thing!"

You're still hiding the concept. What makes this scheme different from running a paper round? I think you need to be more up-front about it. (Also, for a website, it's more appropriate to write "a useful".)

[mattk]

Try to stick with me, this is constructive critisism.

When I click on the affiliate's link at the bottom it takes me to another page. I'm still thinking about delivering leaflets here. Then I get to another click that says "Register as an affiliate here" - when I click on that link I'm into a lottery syndicate site. What ahppened to leaflet delivery?

Can you see how this looks like a scam and how you're just trying to extract a few quid from each punter?