Interested In Your Opinion On My Flyer

[kalooki]

Hey All,

Just got the proof through for my flyer I said I'd like to get your opinion before I went to print,
I know the numbers on phone numbers should have the equal spacing and I'm not to sure about ... and make it look great again.

Anything else let me know.

http://twitpic.com/dlzdn

http://twitpic.com/dlzax

Thanks

Tom

[TARMAG]

Its nice. To the point. Nice colours, not too in your face either!

[BUCKdesigns]

Very nice flyer that, looks really nice and good choice of colours :)

[fisicx]

Had a discussion about flyers with someone the other day.

1. Nobody cares about you. Put your company name down the bottom where it belongs.
2. What's in it for me? Can see any benefits on the flyer. The picture is of bricks, does it work on concrete, tarmac, paving slabs?
3. How much is it?
4. Why tell me your domain name 5 times? Once is enough next to your contact details.
5. You ask me to call for a free estimate but make me then look for the phone number.
6. Front page says to call now but gives no reason to do so (basic rules of a call to action).
7. Text on green background is difficult to read.
8 Why is the car wash thing peeling off?

Apart form that it's fine

(Had a stroll along the seafront and lunch in Burham the other day, ver' nice).

[Arhiann]

...and as I mentioned to you regarding your business card, there are glaring childlike errors on it too. Exactly the same errors as you had on the business card; your designer doesn't learn by his mistakes.

Personally I don't like light text on a dark background and there are reasons why you shouldn't do this, but other than that not too bad.

What I think and whether it sells or not are two different things though. I would have maybe considered changing the FREE CARWASH to something like "free car wash with order during September" or whatever arbitrary time limit you choose; it makes the call to action a little stronger. At the minute it's a bit weak; I think most would expect free quotations.

[fisicx]

Just read your other flyer thread that had lots of good advice. What happened, why didn't you make the changes?

If the business cards have been printed with a mistake then get them back and pay for a new set. Even your flyer still has the same basic errors. It's the little things people notice and a misplaced comma can ruin a potential sale. Not because of the comma alone but because they then start looking other flaws and trust goes out the window.

[XanderMarketing]

Personally, I quite like the designs!

On the first flyer there shouldn't be apostrophes on driveways, patios and drives.

[SusanP]

Flyer 1
* get rid of all apostrophes. There should not be a single apostrophe on this page with your current wording.
* "also provides re-sanding and sealing services ...". What or who "also provides ..."? Better to say "we also provide ...".
* "... help to maintain your investment for years to come and make it look great again". What does 'it' refer to? Better to say 'your driveway' or 'your garden surfaces' or whatever.

Flyer2
* all the Ls look odd. Is it a different font for L only?

Nice colours on both flyers.

[The National Pages]

Hi kalooki,

Really nice first impression, there's a lot to grab your attention and i like the colours used. My only criticism is the line where it says "putting the pressure on..." is slightly on an angle, i think it would look right if it were straightened.

Apart from that it looks sweeeet.

Cheers

Chris

[Eagle]

I'd expect to be shot at dawn if I produced something like that for one of my clients. Those spelling errors are simply unforgiveable.

Design-wise, they're not too shabby but definitely lack 'something'. :)

[Simon-M]

Biggest concern for me is 2 Phone numbers. I'm confused! What if I call the wrong number?

When you couple this with the spelling mistakes you have a poor flyer. Design wise, as Mark says above, it ain't too shabby.

[Gratis Guidance]

I quite like it - I would read it if it came through the letter box.
What's a free car wash got to do with paving? Stick to the point - one subject per leaflet!
Time limits - you don't have any!
Use the most hyped subject in the UK at the moment - recession and greenfriendly

E.g. Feeling skint? Don't show your neighbours - keep your drive looking like a million dollars for only a few quid - call me before the end of the week for an extra 10% off!

Super eco friendly process - kills the weeds not the pets!

Obviously, the lines above are not copy, just an example!

hope this helps!

[Party Lantern]

Sorry to jump on the bandwagon but I'd also really appreciate some critism on our flyer that I have produced using photoshop.

img4.yfrog.com/img4/6156/posterexample.jpg

Any comments on how I could improve this would be much appreciated, I intend to send these out as an insert with newspaper and magazines - does anyone have any recommendations of good companies to use for this method of business promotion?

Any comments and feedback are much appreciated!

Kind Regards,

Adam

[kalooki]

Hey All Again,

Thanks
for mthe comments just looked over what i sent to my designer and I had removed the commas so thats what he put back in but I can mention that to him, definitely will go for We also provide re-sanding and sealing services that will help to maintain your investment for years to come and make your surfaces look great again. May go for make your surfaces sparkle again.

I think the Ls are just strange on the jpeg proof, I print screen into paint then cut off the excess and saved as jpeg it looked a lot worse saving from the pdf into paint and getting a jpeg.

I think for the free car wash Ill change to Free Car Wash with every order in Aug/Sep, I don't mind the peeling sticker something different.#

And im offering that service as it not a big job to do as I have the jet wash all ready to go and I think it adds value to what there getting and if I have earned quite well out the deal there's a Albanian firm who operate on Ind. Est who do a good job so will send the customer down to them and if I really have done well then Ill give them wash and clean inside which will impress a few people and get them talking about the company.

With the phone numbers Im not sure what more I can do, I'd rather not have just the mobile as some people don't like calling mobiles so need to have the landline as well that could at least re direct to the mobile.

I like the idea of kill the weeds not the pets.

The reason I post is to get all your worthwhile comments so thankyou and on the last post I did take some of the comments into practice and with the contentious commas they will be sorted on the next proof.

Thanks again for looking and posting

Tom

[Arhiann]

and with the contentious commas they will be sorted on the next proof.

Incidentally, they are apostrophes, not commas. That's just semantics though. Your business cards aren't printed like that are they? You really need to find a competent designer. Not all designers can spell, but those that can't have a back up that can, or know how to spell check.

I've had a bottle of wine, two beers, and five vodkas and I still manage.

...hic

[Arhiann]

I think the Ls are just strange on the jpeg proof, I print screen into paint then cut off the excess and saved as jpeg

you get some odd results by screen proofing, from memory with the letters i and l. You're better off printing it out really.

In the meantime though shoot anyone that can't differentiate between a possessive apostrophe and a plural. If you can't find anyone to do the shooting, I'm game.

[fisicx]

Remember you are promoting the service not yourself. That's why I suggested moving your company name from the top of both sides and all those URLs. Sell the benefits of cleaning not who your are.

The mobile number is fine, just tell people that you aren't in the office so calling the mobile means they can book an appointment directly.

[Peter Bowen]

I thought the before and after paving images were quite powerful except that the line between seemed badly done.

An idea you might want to consider is making the before and after image in the sillouette of a fat guy/girl and a shapely guy/girl but filling up the picture with the paving - you know how the diet pill adverts work.

I think the free car wash could be dropped. A car wash only costs a fiver so why bother making a big deal about it.